Can you guys rate my poem/give advice?

I know it's not really GCSE-related, but it's for an important anthology that I'm creating that'll be a fantastic selling point for personal statements/uni applications in the future, along with the 3 novels I've written.

It's about appearance vs. reality within people in society, and the common man's foolish influence by the popular, famous, and liked.

The crude statue, dripping in its dull coating of gold

Was hidden to the man behind a thin glass pane;

He turned, parallel to people behind him, dazed

And adopted its current pose, yelling ‘I am bold!’

The idol, a king clinging to heirs aplenty, staring at his sky from some level ground

Then looked forward at his breed of brittle diamond —

The rising effigy had scattered rotten seeds of vicious almond,

And it was now the honourable masses who’d adsorbed yet also shared what they’d found…

The clouds wanted to set over the crowd, as crimson as it was,

With the cracks in their smirks

And mismatched shoes housing one crushed white outcast foot each —

Their Lord’s round and painted eyes rest darted in two directions, blurred

At his unknown artwork.

When a new statuette rose, we stay loud, some bleached.